Psssst….Let’s Discuss This Quietly

Added on by Karen Wilson.
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When is it time for a business language makeover? The excerpts below are from the website of a well-respected natural cosmetics company from Europe. They sell great products – I have used them myself – but you’d never know by looking at their drab presentation and weak writing.

If I might quietly suggest that they quickly review their English language presence…..

“The International Esthetics Cosmetics & Spa Conference is quietly approaching... 4/30 - 5/5”

“As word of mouth spread quickly of the unmatched caliber of products created, [our company's] creations grew to be sought after all over Europe.”

“…[our company's founder] created products that proved to be visionary, foreshadowing todays emphasis on natural ingredients, sourced cruelty free.”